| Lots to enjoy and it was good to see so many different ideas having struggled myself to find a workable one. The two outstanding clues for me were 5 and 46, both of which had me laughing out loud, but 5 gets top marks for the extra subtlety. Then 7 and 31, which hide the join well to provide a good penny-drop. Finally the two Carmens, 21 and 27, which I couldn't choose between. I also had 10, 14, 22, 35 and 45 as contenders, all very good, though the cows were a bit commonplace. A few clues, 2 and 8 in particular, overdid the devilry and lost the plot in the undevilled reading. None of the very short clues did much for me – they wouldn't take much solving for one thing. And I didn't particularly like the clues which just removed 'omen' from the undevilled version. |
Apart from Azed's advice, I haven't seen much, so to some extent made decisions based on:
a) Both devilled (A) and undevilled (B) versions should make sense, more importantly B.
b) The split should occur inside a word in A and the two bits should become attached to MENO, which may (as in 10) or may not (as in most) itself be split.
c) There shouldn't be the same word before and after the split (as in 38).
d) A and B should not be too similar in meaning.
My marks:
1st= (3.5 points each) 22, 44; 3rd (2 points) 10; 4th= (1 point each) 5, 7, 16, 28, 45, 48 |
Satisfactory, let alone first-rate, PD clues are not at all easy to achieve, and I’m afraid that the entries for this competition demonstrate that. If the exercise is to have any point at all, it seems to me (though others will probably disagree) that there are certain criteria that it is essential to meet if a clue is to pass muster:
a. the undevilled version
i. must make good sense
(Out go Clues 2, 8, 17, 41, 49)
ii. must be in natural, unstilted, idiomatic English
(Out go Clues 14, 21, 24, 29, 33, 37. It’s a shame about 24, in which
it is not in fact the PD element itself that produces the stilted and unidiomatic
English; “freedom enough” / “free dough” was a good idea, but unfortunately
rather clumsily executed.)
iii. must be credible, ie, a sentence or form of words that one can readily imagine
reading or hearing spoken
(Out go Clues 4, 13, 27, 32, 35, 44, 47, 48)
b. there must be a marked contrast in meaning (the greater the better) between the undevilled and the devilled versions.
(Out go Clues 9, 12, 20, 23, 25, 31, 34, 38)
c. the devilled version must make at least a sort of sense, however zany, though it is OK for it to be slightly artificially expressed.
(Out go Clues 2, 6, 22, 28, 30, 37, 43, 46, 49)
Ideally, the omission of the clue word should alter a serious or humdrum pronouncement into something piquant or bizarre that raises a smile (and NOT the other way around). In my book, altering the punctuation is acceptable, but the very best clues will contrive to avoid it.
Of the remaining entries, Clues 3, 18, 39, 40, 45 are sound, but rather dull, and the devilled versions of 5, 7 and 19 seem to me to teeter on the edge of meaninglessness. In 26, the contrast, though there, is rather feeble, added to which the undevilled version is wrongly punctuated – it should, surely, read “It’s vital you get here immediately. Come now!”
Of the remaining six:
The undevilled version of 1 is rather strained and only just passes the test at a.iii. above, but the clue does offer the required contrast – 1.5 points
The undevilled version of 10 is one of the most credible, but “numerous works of sin” is a bit flat and doesn’t really gel with the preceding words – 1.5 points
42 is very neat, but I’m not convinced that extreme brevity is a virtue in a PD clue. – 2 points
The construction of the undevilled version of 11 is a shade unnatural (eg, the inclusion of “a” – and would one really express oneself thus?), but the execution of the PD element is masterly – 3 points
The undevilled version of 15 is pushing it slightly under a.iii. above, but the devilled version is suitably bizarre and the contrast the best of the lot – 3.5 points
36 has an entirely credible undevilled version, good contrast and first-rate execution of the PD element, but the devilled version lacks the bizarre qualities of 15 – 3.5 points |
